Friday, 15 May 2015

Missing you....



Son
His eyes
glisten, glister
Hugs me tight
Waves of Reunion
 The toodle-oo moment 
His eyes change, stolid stare
Tears trickling, cheeks moistened
 Weightless drops, heavy on my soul 
Tidal Wave of separation engulfs me


( This is an Etheree.  Etheree is a ten-line poetry ascending in syllable count for ten unrhymed lines. It’s attributed to an American poet, Etheree Taylor Armstrong of Arkansas. An Etheree should focus on one idea or subject )

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24 comments:

  1. I really like the contrast between the waves of reunion and the waves of separation!

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    1. So glad, it appealed to you. Your comments are always cherished, Mary!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Rosemary. I'll grab those words.

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  3. Ah, this is emotional and a beautiful poem.

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    1. I'm trying, Saru. Thanks for those kind words.

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  4. love the wave like layout Susmit...the poem touches deeply...

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    1. Nice words from you, who is so gifted, give a tremendous joy. Thanks Sumanadi!

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  5. Yay! A niceee etheree...loved it, Susmit. The surging emotions and the waves...very well penned... :-)

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    1. So happy you dropped by. Your encouraging words mean so so much to me. Thanks a bunch, Maniparna! I'm learning.

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  6. I can see his face, the tears - so well written! Sad moment of parting, "heavy on my soul".

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    1. It is painful, but at times, you're left with no choices. Those beautiful comments touched me deeply, Sherry!

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  7. Quite an emotive piece depicting the various layers of waves in your beautiful poem. This was excellent :)

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    1. So glad, you liked it. I'll keep on trying. Thanks Sanaa!

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  8. Ah...lovely!! Such an emotive piece. Very moving...great writing,Sushmit!

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    1. You dont even know, how deeply you inspire me with your fluidic writing. I'll grab those nice comments, it really means a lot, Panchalidi!

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  9. Well expressed. I could feel the emotion in the piece.

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    1. Thanks G L! Glad, it appealed to you.

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  10. This is very touching ... loved it :-)

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    1. Oh, so good to see here. Thanks, Amrit!

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  11. An intense ebb and flow of emotion Sumit.
    The form works well also.

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    1. I am missing him a lot. These nice comments come as a breather. Thanks Moonie!

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